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I read your bones after the firestorm.

The silence suits us, the smell consumes us.
Our bodies have been savaged by the flames: eaten.

Blackened by the fierce fire. Ambers still left,
Dancing in our eaten flesh - flickering like incandescents.

We've been entirely devoured, and yet - no regrets.
By our own devices, a fire we both started.

Flames of passion.


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bachus99 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
So concise and sparse - so well captured and a very enjoyable read!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013
I'm so glad you like it! And that's wonderful to hear. :love:
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SplittyDev Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Wow.. This is just amazing..
Reading your texts is like viewing a good movie <3
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
Oh thanks so much. :rose:
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ForestoFairies Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
the dance of a dark fire...
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
:heart:
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mistertrece Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Holy shit i love it!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Fantastic reaction. :giggle:
But what about it exactly?
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mistertrece Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That line: Dancing in our eaten flesh - flickering like incandescents.

I see images in my head, and that´s magic. Thank you for that, you paint images with your words.
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Oh excellent, I'm so glad to hear that! No, thank you for the kind words. :heart:
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mistertrece Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
If i paint something, i want to put this one, if you let me. I´ll credit you and put the link of your gallery, of course!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
As long as you link and credit me, I have no problem with that!
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mistertrece Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No doubt about it!!! :D Thank you!
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I adore your words. Wow, you remind me of me. I feel so close.
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner May 16, 2013
I'm glad you liked it, and could relate to it. :heart:
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I find that the most important when reading poetry, being able to feel and relate.
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Shyanne-Kai Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
It's strange, I normally read poetry quickly, but this piece made me slow down and absorb what is being said. I loved each line, and the fact that they all linked to fire and destruction, yet ultimately there were no regrets, really intrigued me. I'm going to feature it in my journal tomorrow.
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
I'm very glad you thoroughly enjoyed the poem. I'm also happy that you found it interesting.
Thank you for the honor. :rose:
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3wyl Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is quite an interesting piece... I like how you can interpret it in many ways in terms of the concept and what has happened. I like the brevity and the way the phrasing is pretty direct and straight-forward. The words you've chosen suit the atmosphere and mood well, reflecting the happenings too.

It's awesome how there is a bit of rhyming going there, as well as a bit of rhythm. I do have to say that the ending doesn't feel quite finished.. it ended quite abruptly, and perhaps that reflects what has really happened.

I'm thinking it can be related to love, perhaps.. but maybe it is the result of the Holocaust. That came up in my mind when I read this piece.

Pretty poignant. :nod:
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
Thank you for the descriptive and equally intriguing feedback. :hug:
I'm glad that it captures the atmosphere intended as well as mood and that the brevity is also evident.

Thank you again, for the thoughtful feedback. :heart:
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing, absolutely amazing :heart:!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
Thank you kindly for the heart-warming words. :cuddle:
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KMusicDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OH THAT'S SO AMAZING. That is literally what I said after I read this.
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
:giggle: :heart:

Thank you so much! :hug:
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KMusicDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! It is so true. :) I even sent it to a friend in which he fell in love with this poem and I think favourited this and +watched you. :P So, there ya go! :)
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Aw, thanks again. :rose:

He did! Thank you so much for sharing my work with others! :tighthug:

You're too sweet. :smooch:

:heart:
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KMusicDreamer Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are again, very welcome! :)

Sweet! :) You're welcome. It was my pleasure.

Hehe, I try. ;)
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Nimo13 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting description.
Reminds me of being in love :heart:
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Thank you.
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talvipaivanseisaus Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
I love the passion and the slow feeling of things winding down... the silence after the storm.
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
I'm glad you like it. :rose:
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arsenic-sea Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
very intense :) nicely done
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Thank you very much. :heart:
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arsenic-sea Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are welcome :)
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